Rich Dark Arts
Rich Dark Arts
help with my sonnet!!!?
this is my sonnet:
Shall I compare thee to mashed potatoes?
Thou art as creamy and delicious.
From the ground your skin feels rough with dirt,
Dark and rich as cow manure.
Thou has many sprouting eyes,
To see inside my soul.
My love is like the warm running water washing you clean,
Your smooth white skin is revealed.
You make my heart warm,
As though boiling in water.
My insides all soft and mushy
Like butter melting in the sun.
So long as I have thee to taste,
My life will not have been a waste.
can anyone help me make it rhyme!!
whoa what are you trying to do? If you are going to give this poem to a girl I don't suggest you to do that. Seriously If you are in love with a food or something than this poem is great but if its for a person than redo this poem.
Don't compare people with food and don't say that your love is a waterfall that wash whomever clean. This poem is totally messed up.
I am going to redo your poem for you because its so mess up, you know like beyond repairs, so you better thank me for this.
Shall I compare thee to a starry sky
your eyes glistening bright as the moon and the sun
your skin is as smooth as a river's touch
It as the feel of a diamond in the rough
Your glistening eyes sees through my soul
even through my very being to the center where my love holds.
Your eyes stumbled upon a sea of love with a waterfall
washing away your diamond in the rough skin revealing
a pure glistening diamond star warming my heart like the morning sun.
All the water drying making my body soft and mushy
was melting from the warmth and beauty.
So long as I have thee and this sight
my life will not have been a waste
So like I am going to take a copy for myself for it is my poem but you could have this one and do as you please with it. I used a few of your words to redo it but that doesn't make yours. The one that you posted is really not good so use this one
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